Telechat Review of draft-ietf-pim-explicit-tracking-09
review-ietf-pim-explicit-tracking-09-genart-telechat-moriarty-2013-12-18-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-pim-explicit-tracking
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-12-17
Requested 2013-12-12
Draft last updated 2013-12-18
Completed reviews Genart Telechat review of -09 by Kathleen Moriarty (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Magnus Nystrom (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -09 by Magnus Nystrom (diff)
Opsdir Telechat review of -09 by Sarah Banks (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Kathleen Moriarty
State Completed
Review review-ietf-pim-explicit-tracking-09-genart-telechat-moriarty-2013-12-18
Reviewed rev. 09 (document currently at 13)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2013-12-18

Review
review-ietf-pim-explicit-tracking-09-genart-telechat-moriarty-2013-12-18

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at

 

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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

 

Document:  draft-ietf-pim-explicit-tracking-09

Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty

Review Date: December 18, 2013

IETF LC End Date: ?

IESG Telechat date: December 19, 2013

 

Summary:  The document is ready with nits.  It is well written and did a nice job of providing refernces throughout the document where needed.

 

Major issues:

 

Minor issues:

 

Nits/editorial comments:  In the second to last paragraph of section 6, the word “loose” should be “lose”:

   However, the downstream hosts may loose the data packets

   until the routing path is reestablished and the data forwarding is

   restarted.

 

In the security consideration section, no comma is necessary in the following sentence as there are only two items in the list:

 

In order to mitigate such threats, a router enabling the explicit

   tracking function may limit a total amount of membership information

   the router can store, or may rate-limit State-Change Report messages

   per host.