Last Call Review of draft-ietf-lmap-information-model-17

Request Review of draft-ietf-lmap-information-model
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 18)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-03-08
Requested 2017-02-22
Authors Trevor Burbridge, Philip Eardley, Marcelo Bagnulo, Jürgen Schönwälder
Draft last updated 2017-02-26
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -17 by Leif Johansson (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -17 by Russ Housley (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Russ Housley
State Completed
Review review-ietf-lmap-information-model-17-genart-lc-housley-2017-02-26
Reviewed rev. 17 (document currently at 18)
Review result Almost Ready
Review completed: 2017-02-26


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Document: draft-ietf-lmap-information-model-17
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2017-02-26
IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-08
IESG Telechat date: Unknown

Summary: Ready

Major Concerns:

Section 3.1 says that the pre-configuration information contains
the certificate of the Controller or the certificate of the CA
which issued the certificate for the Controller.  Section 3.1.1
includes ma-preconfig-credentials.  Are these the same?

Section 6 says that secure communication channels are needed.  This means
that some components of this system (at least the Controller) must have
secret keys or private keys.  I think that Section 6 should talk about
which components of this system have keys and the consequences if the
keys are not well protected.

Minor Concerns:

The Introduction in RFC 7594 says: "There is a desire to be able
to coordinate the execution of broadband measurements and the
collection of measurement results across a large scale set of
Measurement Agents (MAs)."  The Fact that LMAP is about broadband
measurements should be stated in the first paragraph of the
Introduction of this document.


In Section 3, the reason for the 6 categories should probably be
placed before the list instead of several paragraphs later.

In 3.1: s/If the MA ID is not provided at this stage then/
         /If the MA ID is not provided at this stage, then/