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Request Review of draft-hoffman-tao-as-web-page
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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-07-13
Requested 2012-06-22
Authors Paul Hoffman
Draft last updated 2012-07-15
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -?? by Roni Even
Secdir Last Call review of -?? by Taylor Yu
Assignment Reviewer Roni Even
State Completed
Review review-hoffman-tao-as-web-page-genart-lc-even-2012-07-15
Review completed: 2012-07-15

Review
review-hoffman-tao-as-web-page-genart-lc-even-2012-07-15

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Document: draft-hoffman-tao-as-web-page-02

Reviewer: Roni Even

Review Date:2012–6–28

IETF LC End Date: 2012–7–13

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Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC.

 

Major issues:

 

Minor issues:

In the section 2 the second sentence is “The initial content for the Tao web page will come from the last Internet-Draft that was meant to replace RFC 4677.”. I was wondering if this information is important to this document when published. If it is maybe rephrase it to “

The initial content for the Tao web page is based on the last Internet-Draft that was meant to replace RFC 4677”. 

I also suggest that maybe it will be good to have an informative reference to it.

 

 

Nits/editorial comments:

 

1.

       

Section 1 second paragraph “led” instead of “lead” 

2.

       

Section 2 third paragraph “proposed” instead of “propsed”