Telechat Review of draft-nottingham-rfc5988bis-07
review-nottingham-rfc5988bis-07-genart-telechat-bryant-2017-07-24-00

Request Review of draft-nottingham-rfc5988bis
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 08)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-08-01
Requested 2017-07-18
Authors Mark Nottingham
Draft last updated 2017-07-24
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -05 by Stewart Bryant (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Carlos Martínez (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -05 by Alan DeKok (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -07 by Stewart Bryant (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Stewart Bryant
State Completed
Review review-nottingham-rfc5988bis-07-genart-telechat-bryant-2017-07-24
Reviewed rev. 07 (document currently at 08)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2017-07-24

Review
review-nottingham-rfc5988bis-07-genart-telechat-bryant-2017-07-24

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Document: draft-nottingham-rfc5988bis-07
Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review Date: 2017-07-24
IETF LC End Date: 2017-05-26
IESG Telechat date: 2017-08-03

Summary: Ready except for some confusing IANA text - please see below.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 

I find the following text very confusing:

   IANA will direct any incoming requests regarding the registry to this
   document and, if defined, the processes established by the expert(s);
   typically, this will mean referring them to the registry Web page.
   Note that the expert(s) are allowed (as per Section 2.1.1.1) to
   define additional fields to be collected in the registry.

You cannot direct a request to a document, and I am not sure you collect things
in registry. It would be useful to take another look at the above text.