Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09
review-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09-genart-lc-shirazipour-2014-07-25-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-tcpm-fastopen
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2014-07-23
Requested 2014-07-10
Draft last updated 2014-07-25
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -09 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -09 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Secdir Early review of -08 by Shawn Emery (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Review review-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09-genart-lc-shirazipour-2014-07-25
Reviewed rev. 09 (document currently at 10)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2014-07-25

Review
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Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2014-07-23




IETF LC End Date:   2014-07-23




IESG Telechat date: NA




 




 




Summary:




This draft is ready to be published as Experimental RFC, but I have some comments.




 




Nits/editorial comments:




-Abstract says "thus saving up to one full round trip time (RTT)": by just reading the abstract one would think 1.5 RTT since initial 3WHS is avoided.




Reading the rest of the draft clarifies this though. Suggestion :




 




"




TFO allows data to be carried in the SYN and SYN-ACK packets




   and consumed by the receiving end during 'an' initial connection




   handshake, 'and' saves up to one full round trip time (RTT) compared




   to the standard TCP, ......




"




 




-[page 4] "MSL", to spell out at first use "maximum segment lifetime" (or please consider mentioning reference to key TCP RFCs in Terminology section).




 




-General: Also few other acronyms used without spelling out at first use, please consider those as well.




 




-[Page 7], 'Fast Open Cookie Option', it would be more familiar to IETF community to call "Kind" field "Type", unless there was a reason for this differentiation.







-[Page 10] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed.




 




-[Page 12], typo "connection-sharding"--->"connection-sharing"




 




-[page 14] "as a application"--->"as an application"




 




-[Page 17], typo "Neverthless"--->"Nevertheless"




 




-[Page 18], typo "meet the the"---->"meet the"




 




-[Page 21], typo "in Section Section 4.1.1"---->"in Section 4.1.1"





 




-[Page 21] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed.




 




Best Regards,




Meral




 




 




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