Telechat Review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12
review-ietf-stox-im-12-genart-telechat-dupont-2015-03-04-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-stox-im
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-03-03
Requested 2015-02-15
Authors Peter Saint-Andre, Avshalom Houri, Joe Hildebrand
Draft last updated 2015-03-04
Completed reviews Genart Telechat review of -12 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Review review-ietf-stox-im-12-genart-telechat-dupont-2015-03-04
Reviewed rev. 12 (document currently at 13)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2015-03-04

Review
review-ietf-stox-im-12-genart-telechat-dupont-2015-03-04

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Document: draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20150226
IETF LC End Date: 20150302
IESG Telechat date: 20150305

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2 and Appendix A page 11: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 2: even its meaning is obvious the abbrev IM is never
  introduced.

 - 1 page 3: the word groupchat does not belong formerly to the
  English language...

 - 4 page 5 (twice): acknowledgements -> acknowledgments

 - 8 page 8: signalling -> signaling

 - 11.2 page 10: the first informative reference is for a 2012 I-D.

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr