Last Call Review of draft-ietf-spring-problem-statement-06
review-ietf-spring-problem-statement-06-genart-lc-shirazipour-2016-02-02-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-spring-problem-statement
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 08)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-01-05
Requested 2015-12-18
Authors Stefano Previdi, Clarence Filsfils, Bruno Decraene, Stephane Litkowski, Martin Horneffer, Rob Shakir
Draft last updated 2016-02-02
Completed reviews Opsdir Last Call review of -06 by Tim Chown (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -06 by Klaas Wierenga (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -06 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -06 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -06 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Review review-ietf-spring-problem-statement-06-genart-lc-shirazipour-2016-02-02
Reviewed rev. 06 (document currently at 08)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2016-02-02

Review
review-ietf-spring-problem-statement-06-genart-lc-shirazipour-2016-02-02






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Document:draft-ietf-spring-problem-statement-06




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2016-01-05




IETF LC End Date: 2016-01-05  




IESG Telechat date: 2016-01-21




 




Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Informational RFC.




 




Major issues:




 




Minor issues:




 




Nits/editorial comments:




-[Page 5], "([RFC5305], [RFC3630], [RFC3209]", missing closing ")"




-[Page 5], "need to be signaled "----->"needs to be signaled "




-[Page 5], "number of failures cases"----->"number of failure cases"




-[Page 7], not clear what the "<>" symbol meant




-[Page 11], would be better to center Fig 6




-[Page 15], last ref "[I-D.kumar-spring-sr-oam-requirement]" draft-kumar-spring-sr-oam-requirement is now draft-ietf-spring-sr-oam-requirement




-Suggestion: some acronyms could be spelled out at first use: e.g. VPN, OAM, VPLS, VPWS, PE, CE, P, VRF, SDN, ECMP, PCE




 




Best Regards,




Meral




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Meral Shirazipour




Ericsson Research




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