Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06
review-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06-genart-lc-black-2012-08-21-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 08)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-08-27
Requested 2012-08-09
Draft last updated 2012-08-21
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -06 by David Black (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -07 by David Black (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -?? by Steve Hanna
Assignment Reviewer David Black
State Completed
Review review-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06-genart-lc-black-2012-08-21
Reviewed rev. 06 (document currently at 08)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2012-08-21

Review
review-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06-genart-lc-black-2012-08-21



I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please

see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: 

draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06




Reviewer: David L. Black

Review Date: August 20, 2012

IETF LC End Date: August 20, 2012

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that

should be fixed before publication.




 




This draft covers defect behavior for Ethernet pseudowires

,




including defect state mapping and PE defect reporting behavior.




The draft is generally in good shape.  I found a few minor nits.




 




1) The draft uses a lot of acronyms - while each acronym appears to




b

e expanded on first use, an additional section near the start of the




draft listing

 all of them 

would be helpful.




 




2) There's a typo in the first paragraph of section 2:




 







     covers the following Ethernet OAM (Opertaions

, Administration and 




 




Opertaions

 -> Operations.




 




3) The following normative reference is incomplete - please add additional




information that will enable a reader to locate the referenced document:




 




     [MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", MEF16, January 2006.




 




4) idnits

 2.12.13 did not like the pagination:




 




  == The page length should not exceed 58 lines per page, but there was 22

     longer pages, the longest (page 1) being 61 lines




 




Thanks,




--David




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