Last Call Review of draft-ietf-precis-7700bis-07
review-ietf-precis-7700bis-07-opsdir-lc-brownlee-2017-06-19-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-precis-7700bis |
|---|---|---|
| Requested rev. | no specific revision (document currently at 10) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | Ops Directorate (opsdir) | |
| Deadline | 2017-06-13 | |
| Requested | 2017-05-30 | |
| Draft last updated | 2017-06-19 | |
| Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -07 by Russ Housley
(diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -07 by Nevil Brownlee (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -07 by Daniel Migault (diff) Genart Telechat review of -08 by Russ Housley (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Nevil Brownlee |
| State | Completed | |
| Review | review-ietf-precis-7700bis-07-opsdir-lc-brownlee-2017-06-19 | |
| Reviewed rev. | 07 (document currently at 10) | |
| Review result | Ready | |
| Review completed: | 2017-06-19 |
Review
review-ietf-precis-7700bis-07-opsdir-lc-brownlee-2017-06-19
Hi all:
I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.
In reading this draft, I'm someone with little familiarity with
multi-user chat systems; I found two places where think a little
more explanation would help. These are:
1. In section 1.1 the phrase 'kicking users' is unfamiliar.
2. In section 2 the phrase 'PRECIS FreeformClass' appears.
Would a reference to [RFC7564] be helpful here?
Otherwise, the changes in this draft are made clear in Appendix Q,
to me they seem sensible.
Overall, apart from my 1. and 2. suggestions above, this draft
is ready for submission to IESG.
Cheers, Nevil
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