Telechat Review of draft-ietf-mpls-targeted-mldp-04
|Requested rev.||no specific revision (document currently at 04)|
|Team||General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)|
|Draft last updated||2013-09-11|
Genart Last Call review of -03 by Francis Dupont
Genart Telechat review of -04 by Francis Dupont
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mpls-targeted-mldp-03.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20130827 IETF LC End Date: 20130903 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - in general I don't like the style used in this document but it is still understable. - abstract page 1: it is not recommended to explicitly cite RFCs by number in the abstract (the idea is to make easier to update base specs, note in this particular case the reviewed document should be merged in the references during the update) - 1.2.1 page 4: an example of dubious wording (cf style comment): The particular method used to select an "upstream LSR" is determined by the Service Provider (SP). The method to use is determined by provisioning; whichever method is used, must be known a priori to all the LSRs involved. - 7 page 9: please add the country (USA) Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr PS: in the header I can see "IJsbrands Wijnands", in Authors' Addresses and in the mLDP reference "IJsbrand Wijnands"?