Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mpls-targeted-mldp-03
review-ietf-mpls-targeted-mldp-03-genart-lc-dupont-2013-09-03-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-mpls-targeted-mldp
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 04)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-09-03
Requested 2013-08-22
Authors Maria Napierala, Eric Rosen, IJsbrand Wijnands
Draft last updated 2013-09-03
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -04 by Francis Dupont
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mpls-targeted-mldp-03-genart-lc-dupont-2013-09-03
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 04)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2013-09-03

Review
review-ietf-mpls-targeted-mldp-03-genart-lc-dupont-2013-09-03

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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-targeted-mldp-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20130827
IETF LC End Date: 20130903
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - in general I don't like the style used in this document but it is still
  understable.

 - abstract page 1: it is not recommended to explicitly cite RFCs by number
  in the abstract (the idea is to make easier to update base specs, note
  in this particular case the reviewed document should be merged in the
  references during the update)

 - 1.2.1 page 4: an example of dubious wording (cf style comment):
   The particular method used to select an "upstream LSR" is determined
   by the Service Provider (SP).  The method to use is determined by
   provisioning; whichever method is used, must be known a priori to all
   the LSRs involved.

 - 7 page 9: please add the country (USA)

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr

PS: in the header I can see "IJsbrands Wijnands", in Authors' Addresses
and in the mLDP reference "IJsbrand Wijnands"?