Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mmusic-rtsp-nat-21
review-ietf-mmusic-rtsp-nat-21-genart-lc-dupont-2014-06-23-00
Review
review-ietf-mmusic-rtsp-nat-21-genart-lc-dupont-2014-06-23
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Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-rtsp-nat-21.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20140620
IETF LC End Date: 20140620
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: Ready
Major issues: None
Minor issues: None
(a metacomment anyway: with the arrival of IPv6 we should not spend
too much time/effort on NAT traversal...)
Nits/editorial comments:
- Abstract page 1 (and many other places): signalling -> signaling
- ToC page 3 and 12 page 30: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
- 1 page 3: (style) too many "number" in
There have been a number of suggested ways of resolving the NAT-
traversal of media for RTSP of which a large number are already used
in implementations.
- 3 page 5 (4) (and 6.10 page 20, 9 page 27): e.g. -> e.g.,
- 4.1 page 6: (style) must be -> has to be
- 4.2 page 9 (connection-address): (ambiguous wording)
... An IP address
SHOULD be used, but an FQDN MAY be used in place of an IP address.
- 4.2 page 10 (extension-att-*): delimeter -> delimiter
- 6.3 page 16 (and 6.13 pages 22 and 23):
(uniform use of a space after ';')
RTP/AVP/TCP;unicast;interleaved=0-1 ->
RTP/AVP/TCP; unicast; interleaved=0-1
- 6.7 pages 18 and 19: Succeded -> Succeeded
- 7.1 page 23: will need to be run -> will be run
- 9 page 26: i.e. -> i.e.,
Regards
Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr