Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mboned-driad-amt-discovery-09
review-ietf-mboned-driad-amt-discovery-09-genart-lc-romascanu-2019-11-28-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-mboned-driad-amt-discovery
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2019-12-02
Requested 2019-11-18
Authors Jake Holland
Draft last updated 2019-11-28
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -09 by Henning Rogge (diff)
Rtgdir Last Call review of -09 by Carlos Pignataro (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -09 by Niclas Comstedt (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -09 by Dan Romascanu (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -11 by Daniel Franke (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -09 by Bernard Aboba (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Dan Romascanu
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mboned-driad-amt-discovery-09-genart-lc-romascanu-2019-11-28
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/kQ5y_L49CX_3AaEK9iOBNRXO13Q
Reviewed rev. 09 (document currently at 13)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2019-11-28

Review
review-ietf-mboned-driad-amt-discovery-09-genart-lc-romascanu-2019-11-28

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Document: draft-ietf-mboned-driad-amt-discovery-09
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2019-11-28
IETF LC End Date: 2019-12-02
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

Ready with a couple of nits / editorial clarifications.

This document updates Automatic Multicast Tunneling (AMT) defined by RFC 7450 by defining  DNS Reverse IP AMT Discovery (DRIAD), an extension of the relay discovery process to use a new DNS resource record named AMTRELAY when discovering AMT relays for source-specific multicast channels.  

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

1. The reading of 2.4.1 and 2.4.3 seemed to me confusing. 2.4.1 speaks about 'establishing' a connection while 2.4.3 speaks about 'completing' a connection. Are the two terms equivalent? If so, I would prefer to use only one of them, if not, some more clarification is necessary. 

2. The term 'tier 3 ISP' used in Section 3.1.1 is an 'industry term' that needs to be defined, either by reference or in text.