Last Call Review of draft-ietf-lwig-ikev2-minimal-03
review-ietf-lwig-ikev2-minimal-03-opsdir-lc-wicinski-2015-10-09-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-lwig-ikev2-minimal
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 05)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2015-10-02
Requested 2015-09-28
Authors Tero Kivinen
Draft last updated 2015-10-09
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Ron Bonica (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -05 by Ron Bonica
Opsdir Last Call review of -03 by Tim Wicinski (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Tim Wicinski 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-lwig-ikev2-minimal-03-opsdir-lc-wicinski-2015-10-09
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 05)
Review result Has Nits
Review completed: 2015-10-09

Review
review-ietf-lwig-ikev2-minimal-03-opsdir-lc-wicinski-2015-10-09

All,

[ I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's
ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the
IESG. These comments were written with the intent of improving the
operational aspects of the  IETF drafts. Comments that are not
addressed in last call may be included in AD reviews during the IESG
review.  Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments
just like any other last call comments.]

Version Reviewed: draft-ietf-lwig-ikev2-minimal-04

Summary:  Ready with minor nits

This is a Last Call/Special Request so I performed this with some haste.


I am not going to say I was able to spend the time I wish to spend 


walking through the implementation details, and I hope the Document 


Shepherd has performed a more through read.





1.  Introduction

   NAT Traversal, IKE SA rekey, Child SA Rekey, Multiple Child SAs,

issue: There should be some standard way of the 'rekey' phrase -
either 'rekey' or 'Rekey'.

   This document is inteded to be stand-alone, meaning everything needed

typo: intended

1.1 Use Cases

   always initiated from that sleeping node when they wale up and after

typo: 'wake up'

References:

I-D.ietf-ipsecme-oob-pubkey - references but is a dead Working Group
document.  Should reference draft-kivinen-ipsecme-oob-pubkey-12, which is
in IESG review currently.

A.5.  Identification Payloads

question: It's the only Payload which is plural, while the others are all
singular. It may be a minor nit, but it looks like it's one Payload.