Last Call Review of draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-04
review-ietf-kitten-cammac-04-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-12-03-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-kitten-cammac
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 04)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-12-04
Requested 2015-11-20
Draft last updated 2015-12-03
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -00 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -00 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -04 by Meral Shirazipour
Opsdir Last Call review of -00 by Qin Wu (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Review review-ietf-kitten-cammac-04-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-12-03
Reviewed rev. 04
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2015-12-03

Review
review-ietf-kitten-cammac-04-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-12-03






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Document: draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-04




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2015-12-02




IETF LC End Date:  2015-12-04 (2

nd

 LC)




IESG Telechat date: 2015-12-17 




 




 




Summary:




This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments/nits.




 




Major issues:




 




Minor issues:




 




Nits/editorial comments:




[Page 3] 2nd and 3rd paragraph: The word "service" is used to designate both the proxy-service and the second backend "application-service" as per [MS-SFU]. This may confuse the reader at first read.




Suggestion would be to use "proxy-service" and "application-service". [Page 8] after point "2." would also benefit from clearer use of these terms.




 




[Page 8], last paragraph, it was not clear to me if  "service principal" is the "application service"?




 




Best Regards,




Meral




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