Telechat Review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05
review-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2017-03-16-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 06)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-03-14
Requested 2017-02-16
Authors Paul Wouters, Daniel Migault, John Mattsson, Yoav Nir, Tero Kivinen
Draft last updated 2017-03-16
Completed reviews Secdir Telechat review of -05 by Christian Huitema (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -05 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Opsdir Telechat review of -05 by Fred Baker (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Review review-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2017-03-16
Reviewed rev. 05 (document currently at 06)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2017-03-16

Review
review-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2017-03-16

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Document: draft-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-03-14
IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-15
IESG Telechat date: 2017-03-16

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards RFC, but I have some comments.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 4], "downgraded from MUST to MUST-". MUST- is defined later in the document. Perhaps a reference in the text should point to that section on p.5.
-[Page 7], "were not been mentioned"---->"have not been mentioned"
-[Page 7], "this document clarify"---->"this document clarifies"
-[Page 11], "that revisions of that"---->"that revisions of this"

-general, some acronyms are not spelled out...VPN, MTU..
-Tables P.5,6,8,9,10. Giving them a caption would make the document clearer.



Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com