Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ipfix-data-link-layer-monitoring-06
review-ietf-ipfix-data-link-layer-monitoring-06-genart-lc-campbell-2013-10-23-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ipfix-data-link-layer-monitoring
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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-10-23
Requested 2013-10-10
Authors Shingo Kashima, Atsushi Kobayashi, Paul Aitken
Draft last updated 2013-10-23
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -06 by Ben Campbell (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -07 by Ben Campbell (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -06 by Sam Hartman (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Ben Campbell
State Completed
Review review-ietf-ipfix-data-link-layer-monitoring-06-genart-lc-campbell-2013-10-23
Reviewed rev. 06 (document currently at 08)
Review result Ready with Issues
Review completed: 2013-10-23

Review
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Document: draft-ietf-ipfix-data-link-layer-monitoring-06
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2013-22-10
IETF LC End Date: 2013-23-10

Summary: Ready for publication as a proposed standard, with  one problem that should be easily fixed.

Major issues:

None

Minor issues:

3.2.18:

Title of the data element suggests a total, but the description sounds like a delta (i.e change since last report.)

-- section 4 and subsections

It looks like this draft updates at least RFC5477. If so, this should be indicated in the header and in the abstract.



Nits/editorial comments:

-- section , 3rd paragraph:

Do you mean to say the existing data models do not contain the elements needed, or that the models do not provide the right foundation for the needed elements? The wording seems to indicate the latter but I think you mean the former.

-- General:
Watch for missing articles.