Last Call Review of draft-ietf-i2rs-architecture-13
review-ietf-i2rs-architecture-13-genart-lc-housley-2016-03-07-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-i2rs-architecture
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 15)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-03-14
Requested 2016-03-01
Draft last updated 2016-03-07
Completed reviews Genart Early review of -06 by Russ Housley (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -13 by Russ Housley (diff)
Secdir Early review of -07 by Charlie Kaufman (diff)
Opsdir Early review of -07 by Fred Baker (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -06 by Russ White (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -09 by Carlos Pignataro (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Russ Housley
State Completed
Review review-ietf-i2rs-architecture-13-genart-lc-housley-2016-03-07
Reviewed rev. 13 (document currently at 15)
Review result Ready with Issues
Review completed: 2016-03-07

Review
review-ietf-i2rs-architecture-13-genart-lc-housley-2016-03-07

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Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-architecture-13
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2016-03-06
IETF LC End Date: 2016-03-14
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready.

Major Concerns: None

Minor Concerns:

Section 4.2 talks about authorization.  I would expect policy to
dictate that some writes come from a specific source, but it is
unclear to me whether I2RS can require that a particular write
request arrive on a particular channel.  Is this desirable?  If so,
please expand the discussion of authorization to cover this point.


Nits:

Sometimes you say "i2rs architecture", but it should say "I2RS
architecture" to be consistent throughout the document.

Sometimes you say "I2RS Agent" and other times you say "I2RS agent".
Please pick one and use it consistently.

Sometimes you say "I2RS Client" and other times you say "I2RS client".
Please pick one and use it consistently.

Section 3: s/ may may vary based / may vary based /

Section 6.3: s/ the yang data model / the YANG data model /

Section 6.4.2: some bullets have periods, but others do not.

Section 7.1: s/ Yang / YANG / (more than one place)