Last Call Review of draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-07
review-ietf-homenet-dncp-07-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-07-30-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-homenet-dncp
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 12)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-07-29
Requested 2015-07-16
Authors Markus Stenberg, Steven Barth
Draft last updated 2015-07-30
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -07 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -09 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -10 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -11 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -07 by Victor Kuarsingh (diff)
Opsdir Telechat review of -09 by Victor Kuarsingh (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -03 by Les Ginsberg (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -05 by Thomas Clausen (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -03 by Lizhong Jin (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Review review-ietf-homenet-dncp-07-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-07-30
Reviewed rev. 07 (document currently at 12)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2015-07-30

Review
review-ietf-homenet-dncp-07-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-07-30






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Document: draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-08




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2015-07-29




IETF LC End Date:  2015-07-29




IESG Telechat date: NA




 




 




Summary:




This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments .




 




 




Major issues:




 




Minor issues:




 




Nits/editorial comments:




 




-Abstract, suggestion:




"uses Trickle"---->"uses the Trickle algorithm"




 




-Abstract, suggestion:




"DNCP is an abstract protocol, that"---->"DNCP is an abstract protocol, and"





 




-[Page 3], Intro, last paragraph the terms "infrequently" and "As the network of nodes, or the rate of data changes grows over a given time interval"




it would be good to give example values or ranges to better describe what is meant by these terms.




 




-[Page 3], "specifies transport method"---->"specifies the transport method"




 




-[Page 10], "higher then"---->"higher than"




 




-[Page 28], "Certifcate"---->"Certificate"




 




-Please consider adding caption and title to all figures.




 




Best Regards,




Meral




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Meral Shirazipour




Ericsson




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