Last Call Review of draft-ietf-cellar-ffv1-16

Request Review of draft-ietf-cellar-ffv1
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 18)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2020-07-16
Requested 2020-07-09
Requested by Jean Mahoney
Authors Michael Niedermayer, Dave Rice, Jérôme Martinez
Draft last updated 2020-07-13
Completed reviews Secdir Early review of -02 by Liang Xia (diff)
Genart Early review of -03 by Matthew Miller (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -16 by Liang Xia (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -16 by Joel Halpern (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -17 by Qin Wu (diff)
I put the review request into a closed state somehow, so I'm requesting a review to reassign.
Assignment Reviewer Joel Halpern 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-cellar-ffv1-16-genart-lc-halpern-2020-07-13
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Reviewed rev. 16 (document currently at 18)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2020-07-13


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Document: draft-ietf-cellar-ffv1-16
Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review Date: 2020-07-13
IETF LC End Date: 2020-07-16
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document appears to be ready for publication as an Informational RFC.

*I would have raised question about the intended status, but it appears that this is an established IETF convention and I see no reason to argue.)

Major issues:

Minor issues:
    Section 3.4 (Context) introduces the notation Q_{#}[ subscript }.  As that is the first reference to Q_{#}, it is rather confusing to the reader.  I grant that the term is defined in the next section (3.5).  Couldn't they be reversed?

    Section refers to C(i), C_{i}, and C_i.  Are these all the same thing.

    Section refers to get-rac (which is treated as a function in the pseudo-code) as being the process described in section  The text in does not call out any of its computed values as an explicit result or return.  While I would guess that the intention is to use the byte stream (B()), the text does not actually say that.  If that is the intention, could the last line of be "get_rac() returns sequential bytes from the Byte Stream (B()) as computed by the computation described in section"?

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