Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11
review-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11-genart-lc-holmberg-2013-09-26-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-09-19
Requested 2013-09-05
Authors Sergio Belotti, Pietro Grandi, Daniele Ceccarelli, Diego Caviglia, Fatai Zhang, Dan Li
Draft last updated 2013-09-26
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -11 by Christer Holmberg (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -12 by Christer Holmberg (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -11 by Warren Kumari (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Christer Holmberg 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11-genart-lc-holmberg-2013-09-26
Reviewed rev. 11 (document currently at 13)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2013-09-26

Review
review-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11-genart-lc-holmberg-2013-09-26






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Document:                         draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11




Reviewer:                           Christer Holmberg




Review Date:                     26 September 2013




IETF LC End Date:             19 September, 2013




IESG Telechat date:         N/A




 




Summary:           The document is well written, and ready for publication, but contains some editorial issues that I suggest that the authors consider addressing.




 




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                Q_G_1: The document says “ITU-T recommendation G.XXX”, “ITU-T G.XXX”, and “G.XXX”. Please use consistent terminology.




 




 




Section 3:




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                Q_3_1: The text says “ITU-T recommendation defines”. I guess that shall be G.709?