Telechat Review of draft-ietf-aqm-recommendation-09
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Deadline 2015-02-17
Requested 2015-02-12
Draft last updated 2015-03-16
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -08 by Elwyn Davies (diff)
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Review review-ietf-aqm-recommendation-09-genart-telechat-davies-2015-03-16
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Document: draft-ietf-aqm-recommendation-09.txt
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2015/02/09
IETF LC End Date: 2014/12/24
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Summary:  Almost ready for BCP.  I have done some homework on the 


subject of AQM since my previous review and reread the latest version 


(-09).  I think a couple of my comments in the previous review were 


inappropriate - apologies to the authors - and we did not come to a 


meeting of minds at that point.  On rereading, I think it is generally 


an excellent and readable document.  However there are a couple of 


points, including one left over from the previous review, that could be 


usefully and (IMO) importantly taken into account.





Minor Issues:

Ensuring that mechanisms do not interact badly:


Given that a number of different mechanisms are being developed and 


potentially may all be deployed in various quantities in routers, etc., 


along the path that a packet takes, ensuring that this does not lead to 


instability or other interactions should also be a target of research. 


A number of applications now have flow control mechanisms that may be 


deployed as an adjunct to TCP so that a single path may have multiple 


nested end-to-end feedback loops (notably, just about to be 


standardized, HHTP2!) and it would be very wise to ensure that adding 


AQM into the loop does not lead to problems.



A short extra paragraph in s4.6 would cover the case I think.

Interactive applications such as gaming; and


The gaming aspect is mentioned very briefly (in s4.6).  Gaming is a 


major application and, for many consumers, ensuring that interaction 


with server-based games is low latency and pretty reliable is key to 


their enjoyment and the continuation of a large segment of the computer 


entertainment market.




Combinations of traffic:


A little more stress on the need to consider combinations of traffic in 


further research would be desirable.  I found CableLabs report of their 


simulation comparisons of the various AQM mechanisms being developed to 


be instructive in various ways: general AQM background, requirements of 


gaming and similar applications and thinking about combinations of traffic.




Nits/editorial comments:
(not fixed from -08)
General: s/e.g./e.g.,/, s/i.e./i.e.,/

s1.2, para 2(?) - top of p4: s/and often necessary/and is often necessary/
s1.2, para 3: s/a > class of technologies that/a class of technologies that/
                 ^^^^^^

s2, first bullet 3: s/Large burst of packets/Large bursts of packets/



s2, second set of bullets, #2: Probably need to expand POP and RDP (DNS 


and IMAP are in the RFC editor's "well known" class).  Alternatively 


could change POP/IMAP to "email access protocols".






s3, bullet #2, last para: s/open a large numbers of short TCP flows/may 


open a large number of short duration TCP flows/






s4, last para: s/experience occasional issues that need moderation./can 


experience occasional issues that warrant mitigation./




s4.2, para 6, last sentence: s/similarly react/react similarly/

s4.2.1, para 1: s/using AQM to decider when/using AQM to decide when/

s4.7, para 3:



the use of Map/Reduce applications in data centers



I think this needs a reference or a brief explanation.  Maybe:


Jeffrey Dean and Sanjay Ghemawat. 2008. MapReduce. Commun. ACM 51, 1 


(January 2008), 107–113. DOI:

http://dx.doi.org/10.1145/1327452.1327492