An Architecture for IPv6 over the Time-Slotted Channel Hopping Mode of IEEE 802.15.4 (6TiSCH)
draft-ietf-6tisch-architecture-30
Yes
(Suresh Krishnan)
No Objection
(Deborah Brungard)
Note: This ballot was opened for revision 24 and is now closed.
Roman Danyliw
No Objection
Comment
(2019-08-22 for -25)
Sent for earlier
Thank you for addressing my COMMENTs.
Éric Vyncke
(was No Record, No Objection)
No Objection
Comment
(2019-08-07 for -24)
Sent
Pascal, Thank you for the hard work put into this document. It is extensive and comprehensive. I really appreciate this well-written document as it is clear (albeit long...), so, the COMMENTs and NITs are to improve the document quality and not as a negative criticism; your reply + comments will be welcome though. Regards, Bien à toi, -éric == COMMENTS == -- Section 1 -- Suggest to be more specific about the backbone: layer-2 or IP backbone ? -- Section 2.1 -- Please define 'PAN' before first use. The choice of 'ASN' in an IETF document was probably not the choice... ;-) I was unable to understand the concept and use of layer-2 bundle by reading the definition. Let's hope it is defined/explained later... It is probably too late to change now, but, this section is really too heavy and by alphabetical order, so, its usefulness is reduced for first-time readers. Section 3 is rather easy to read for similar explanations. -- Section 3.2 -- For my own curiosity, reducing mcast is always good of course but not critical on the backbone if it is wired Ethernet. So, why mentioning this fact in this memo? -- Section 3.4 -- Minor inconsistency between the list of the schedule management ways and the enumeration. Nothing critical though but confusing. In "Neighbor-to-Neighbor Scheduling", perhaps replace "between adjacent routers" by "between adjacent peers" as the text is mainly about peers? -- Section 3.6 -- It is probably useful to define what "feasable" means in the context of this memo. Probably too late in the publication process to change, but, I would suggest to use "6LoWPAN Fragments Forwarding" (plural) of even "6LoWPAN Fragments Chain Forwarding". More a nit but can you re-use the same names in the table at the end of the section? This table should also have a number such as Table 1 -- Section 3.7 -- Figure 4 mentions "to be IEEE Std. 802.15.12"... this is a hint to a IEEE work which should be explained in the text or be removed. -- Section 3.8 -- The first paragraph would benefit if it was clear that it is about "*difference* between information and data models". Please define what "duocast" is ;-) -- Section 4.1.2 -- Its title is just in the reverse order of the previous sentence :-O And, should it mention "colocated" ? -- Section 4.2.2 -- Is there a difference between "IPv6 ND" in figure 5 and figure 6? It is followed by "NA" "NS" in the latter. -- Section 4.3.3 -- Please define "ETX" and "LQI" ? -- Section 4.4 -- Is it on purpose that there is a lot of overlap with section 3.4 ? -- Section 4.5.3 -- Is it worth to define "PRE" or is DetNet knowledge assumed? -- Section 4.6 -- Please be consistent with the naming of the sub-sections wrt "three different forwarding model" -- Section 5 -- Please replace "This specification" by "This document" as it is not aimed to be a Proposed Standard. -- Section 6 -- "ASN" was not fully described before (except briefly in terminology section), so, I find it weird to build the security section around this concept; moreover, as it comes from DetNet, I would assume that the DetNet documents are more suitable to have this security discussion (with just a point in this memo). == NITS == -- Section 1 -- A comma is probably needed before "Industrial Automation Control Systems (IACS)". Same section could possibly also introduce the 'IT' acronym. s/require the addition/requires the addition/ ? s/, e.g., an Ethernet bridged network,/ (e.g. an Ethernet bridged network)/ -- Section 2.1 -- s/: : /: / -- Section 3.2 -- s/RPL network needs to share information/RPL network need to share information/ ? -- Section 3.7 -- s/aloha/Aloha/ ? The sentence "The reference stack that the 6TiSCH architecture presents was implemented and interop tested" would benefit from a couple of commas. -- Section 4.3.1.1 -- Duplicate line. Duplicate line. ;-) - Section 4.6 -- s/three different forwarding model, /three different forwarding models: /
Suresh Krishnan Former IESG member
Yes
Yes
(for -24)
Unknown
Alissa Cooper Former IESG member
No Objection
No Objection
(2019-08-08 for -24)
Sent
I support Benjamin's first DISCUSS point.
Alvaro Retana Former IESG member
No Objection
No Objection
(2019-08-07 for -24)
Not sent
I support Mirja's DISCUSS. The same point has been brought up in several of the Directorate reviews...for example [1] and [2]. It seems that the concern has not been fully addressed. [1] https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/tsv-art/OErnkMZ1Vb-BzYSGRs1KMC7g_f8 [2] https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/rtg-dir/9eR1oXVO0_n6Cl3CFV1Ytxrv2FU
Barry Leiba Former IESG member
No Objection
No Objection
(2019-08-07 for -24)
Not sent
I agree with Mirja’s DISCUSS.
Benjamin Kaduk Former IESG member
(was Discuss)
No Objection
No Objection
(2019-08-23 for -25)
Sent
Thank you for addressing my Discuss and Comment points!
Deborah Brungard Former IESG member
No Objection
No Objection
(for -24)
Not sent
Mirja Kühlewind Former IESG member
(was Discuss)
No Objection
No Objection
(2019-10-25 for -27)
Sent
Thanks for addressing my discuss and putting more work into the doc. OLD COMMENT: As I said, I only had a rather brief read, however, I had a bit of problems to follow exactly which parts of the architecture rely on existing protocols and mechanisms and where 6tsch actually needs to define new approaches. Maybe a short, even higher-level overview than section 3, could address this and help the reader.