Last Call Review of draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18
review-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-03-22-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 19)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-03-20
Requested 2017-03-06
Other Reviews Secdir Telechat review of -18 by Dan Harkins (diff)
Opsdir Telechat review of -18 by Jon Mitchell (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review review-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-03-22
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/7TQZyTTAGNOHBEwuocQsHpMOCEg
Reviewed rev. 18 (document currently at 19)
Review result Ready with Nits
Draft last updated 2017-03-22
Review completed: 2017-03-22

Review
review-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-03-22

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Document: draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-03-16
IETF LC End Date:   2017-03-20
IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-13


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 3] "an other hardware has"---->"and other hardware have"
-[Page 4], the word "subprotocol" was not clear to me. Would it be possible to add in parenthesis a few example for protocol and subprotocol?
-[Page 4], "an WebRTC"--->""a WebRTC"
-[Page 7], "Interactive Connectivty"--->"Interactive Connectivity"
-General: please spell out acronyms at first use
-General: the writing (or perhaps lack of punctuation) in this draft made it hard to read. Please consider reviewing it especially if the draft is intended as Standards Track.



Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com