Last Call Review of draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18
review-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-03-22-00

Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Title Last Call Review of draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18
Request Last Call - requested 2017-03-06
Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review result Ready with Nits
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/7TQZyTTAGNOHBEwuocQsHpMOCEg
Last updated 2017-03-22

Review
review-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-03-22

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Document: draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-03-16
IETF LC End Date:   2017-03-20
IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-13


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 3] "an other hardware has"---->"and other hardware have"
-[Page 4], the word "subprotocol" was not clear to me. Would it be possible to add in parenthesis a few example for protocol and subprotocol?
-[Page 4], "an WebRTC"--->""a WebRTC"
-[Page 7], "Interactive Connectivty"--->"Interactive Connectivity"
-General: please spell out acronyms at first use
-General: the writing (or perhaps lack of punctuation) in this draft made it hard to read. Please consider reviewing it especially if the draft is intended as Standards Track.



Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com