Last Call Review of draft-ietf-precis-7700bis-07
review-ietf-precis-7700bis-07-opsdir-lc-brownlee-2017-06-19-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-precis-7700bis
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2017-06-13
Requested 2017-05-30
Other Reviews Genart Last Call review of -07 by Russ Housley (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -07 by Daniel Migault (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -08 by Russ Housley (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Nevil Brownlee
Review review-ietf-precis-7700bis-07-opsdir-lc-brownlee-2017-06-19
Posted at https://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/ops-dir/current/msg02708.html
Reviewed rev. 07 (document currently at 10)
Review result Ready
Draft last updated 2017-06-19
Review completed: 2017-06-19

Review
review-ietf-precis-7700bis-07-opsdir-lc-brownlee-2017-06-19

Hi all:

I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.

In reading this draft, I'm someone with little familiarity with
multi-user chat systems; I found two places where think a little
more explanation would help.  These are:
 1. In section 1.1 the phrase 'kicking users' is unfamiliar.
 2. In section 2 the phrase 'PRECIS FreeformClass' appears.
      Would a reference to [RFC7564] be helpful here?

Otherwise, the changes in this draft are made clear in Appendix Q,
to me they seem sensible.

Overall, apart from my 1. and 2. suggestions above, this draft
is ready for submission to IESG.

Cheers, Nevil

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