Last Call Review of draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-kitten-cammac
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 04)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-01-06
Requested 2014-11-28
Draft last updated 2014-12-12
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -00 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -00 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -04 by Meral Shirazipour
Opsdir Last Call review of -00 by Qin Wu (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Review review-ietf-kitten-cammac-00-genart-lc-shirazipour-2014-12-12
Reviewed rev. 00 (document currently at 04)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2014-12-12


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Document: draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-00

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2014-11-29

IETF LC End Date:  2014-12-09

IESG Telechat date: NA




This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments .



Minor issues:


Nits/editorial comments:


[Page 1], Abstract section, please remove the duplication of the word abstract (first word of first sentence).


[Page 1], Abstract, suggestion: the actual motivation should be briefly mentioned in the abstract. (e.g. that AD-KDC-ISSUED is not sufficient in cases where ...).


[Page 3], "The svc-verifier element of the CAMMAC", is svc newly introduced in this draft? If so it would be clearer to mention it, e.g. "The new svc-verifier element of the CAMMAC"


[Page 3], same sentence as above, should it be "AD-CAMMAC" instead of "CAMMAC" ?


[Page 3], "svc-verifier", does svc acronym stand for something? (service and the Key Distribution Center ? ) Both svc and should be spelled out at first use.


[Page 6], Section 5, if an Application server does not recognize the AD-CAMMAC container and the latter was not enclosed in the AD-IF-RELEVENT,

should the Application server send an error or ignore ? 



Best Regards,



Meral Shirazipour