Last Call Review of draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-07

Request Review of draft-ietf-homenet-dncp
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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-07-29
Requested 2015-07-16
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Review State Completed
Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review review-ietf-homenet-dncp-07-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-07-30
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Reviewed rev. 07 (document currently at 12)
Review result Ready with Nits
Draft last updated 2015-07-30
Review completed: 2015-07-30


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Document: draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-08

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2015-07-29

IETF LC End Date:  2015-07-29

IESG Telechat date: NA




This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments .



Major issues:


Minor issues:


Nits/editorial comments:


-Abstract, suggestion:

"uses Trickle"---->"uses the Trickle algorithm"


-Abstract, suggestion:

"DNCP is an abstract protocol, that"---->"DNCP is an abstract protocol, and"


-[Page 3], Intro, last paragraph the terms "infrequently" and "As the network of nodes, or the rate of data changes grows over a given time interval"

it would be good to give example values or ranges to better describe what is meant by these terms.


-[Page 3], "specifies transport method"---->"specifies the transport method"


-[Page 10], "higher then"---->"higher than"


-[Page 28], "Certifcate"---->"Certificate"


-Please consider adding caption and title to all figures.


Best Regards,



Meral Shirazipour