Last Call Review of draft-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri-03
review-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2013-03-08-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 07)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-03-06
Requested 2013-02-21
Other Reviews Genart Telechat review of -03 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
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Review State Completed
Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review review-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2013-03-08
Posted at http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/gen-art/current/msg08260.html
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 07)
Review result Ready with Nits
Draft last updated 2013-03-08
Review completed: 2013-03-08

Review
review-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2013-03-08






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Document: draft-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri-03




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2013-03-06




IETF LC End Date: 2013-03-06




IESG Telechat date: NA




 




 




Summary:




This draft is ready to be published as Proposed Standard but I have some comments.




 




 




Nits/editorial comments:




[Page 1] please consider spelling out "URI" in the abstract as in "uniform resource identifier (URI)"




[Page 3] paragraph 4, "method for deferencing", do you mean "dereferencing" ?




[Page 5] Section 5, "..access to personally identifying information..", do you mean "..access to identifiable personal information" ?




 




 




Best Regards,




Meral




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